On 20/05/11 06:30, Jos Poortvliet wrote:
On Tuesday 17 May 2011 09:00:50 jdd wrote:
Le 16/05/2011 23:24, Jos Poortvliet a écrit :
But we're back in Business, Karl Cheney has made an updated version - and
here it is. Let us know your thoughts, esp when it comes to refining the
text!!!
Please take into account local customisation and translation.
I mean that of course we need the source, but also that when printing
locally, color is unavailable as shown on the project. It's pretty
easy (and in France mandatory - blank paper is only authorized for
government papers for public diffusion) to use color paper, but then
of course the color is the same everywhere nd the photo only B&W
that said, the document is very smart :-)
thanks
jdd
Hmm, what you are saying is that we need a black-and-white version, yes?
Karl, can you do that in a reasonable way, you think, or does that require a
lot of re-design?
Moreover, Karl, you mentioned the text is a tad long and for an A4 version we
need to shorten it... Could you send the text that is too much to me in a
separate mail, I'll munch over it and shorten it a bit. Please tell me by how
much approximately I need to shorten it...
I found a couple of typos:
- Working Together:
"...supporting 21 distro’s on seven architectures." - remove the
apostrophe in "distros".
- For Users:
"But shoulld you want more..." - should be "should"
- For Administrators:
"It’s powerful and flexibile with it’s unique command line" - remove
apostrophe in second "its".
- Get Connected:
- Twitter.com and Identi.ca should probably be lower case.
- SUSE Studio:
- "customized with your packages, script and artwork" - suggest
pluralizing "scripts".
- "desktop Choice" heading should be "Desktop Choice" (upper case)
- Tumbleweed:
URL is http://en.opensuse.org/tumbleweed - all other URLs lack the
protocol specifier (not sure if this is intentional).
Nice brochure, BTW :)
Regards,
Tim
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