Hi Wes, 

Thank you for the review. 

The changes to take into account your review can be seen at: 
https://github.com/boucadair/ipfix-tcpoptions-and-v6eh/commit/8bd7d7f92180a8eeaeb9ce13c0028a5c698b1738

Please see inline for more context. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Wesley Eddy via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org>
> Envoyé : mardi 2 janvier 2024 19:20
> À : tsv-...@ietf.org
> Cc : draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh....@ietf.org;
> opsawg@ietf.org
> Objet : Tsvart early review of draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh-
> 05
> 
> Reviewer: Wesley Eddy
> Review result: Ready with Issues
> 
> Comments:
> 
> - The document is well-written and easy to read.
> 
> - Section 6 is really nice and helpful!
> 
> Issues:
> 
> - The way an implementation understands the TCP ExIDs may benefit
> from slightly more explanation:
>   -- In 4.2 and 4.3, is the idea that the implementation is just
> sampling the
>   16 or 32 bits following the experimental option kind being
> indicated, and
>   assuming those 2 or 4 bytes to be ExIDs?  From Section 6.2, I
> got the sense
>   that the implementation is aware of particular ExID values
> specifically, to
>   know if they should be reported as 2 or 4 byte values.

[Med] 2-byte IDs are reported in tcpSharedOptionExID16 while 4-byte IDs are 
reported in tcpSharedOptionExID32. 

 -- Will
> any values
>   present be reported, or only those which show up in the IANA
> registry?  I
>   assume any values will be reported, even if they are not
> registered ExIDs,
>   since the registry changes over time, and implementations
> probably don't grab
>   periodic updates of it.

[Med] Any observed ID must be reported independent of whether the value is 
registered or not. Made "s/Observed/Any observed" in the relevant sections.

> 
> Questions:
> 
> - This may be alright, but it seemed to me like for
> interoperability there should be some way to indicate what an
> implementation of this IE is doing with regard to this text in
> Section 3.1 (where maybe "may" should be "MAY"?):
> 
>       Several extension header chains may be observed in a Flow.
> These
>       extension headers may be aggregated in one single
>       ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull Information Element or be exported
> in
>       separate ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IEs, one for each
> extension
>       header chain.
> 

[Med] I went with this change:  s/may be aggregated/MAY be aggregated

> - In Section 3.3, it seems backwards to me that this Limit IE
> being True means that no limitation was applied, whereas False
> means that it was limited.  If the WG and implementers are okay
> with this, I'm not questioning it, but it seems odd, so I just
> wanted to make sure this was the intention.
> 

[Med] ACK.

> Nits:
> 
> - The first paragraph in section 1 should probably mention the
> specific RFC(s) for the specified IEs with the noted problems,
> since it sounds from the beginning paragraphs of section 3 and 4
> like some of those are already being addressed by the separate
> ipfix-fixes document.

[Med] Added a reference to the IANA registry as that is the normative ref for 
these IEs as per the following from RFC7012:


   [IANA-IPFIX] is now the normative reference for IPFIX Information
   Elements.  When [RFC5102] was published, it defined, in its
   Section 5, the initial contents of that registry.

> 
> - Section 1.1, "do no correspond" -> "do not correspond"

[Med] Fixed
> 

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