Hi Jim,
thanks for the review.
see below.
Peter
Jim Schaad schreef op 2019-02-16 20:55:
> 1. In section 10.1 the last sentence of the first paragraph and the first
> sentence of the last paragraph duplicate each other. This should be cleaned
> up.
>
> <pvds>removed the 2nd instance </pvds>
>
> 2. Correct the grammar in the first sentence of section 10.2 - s/registers
> a new/registers new/
> <pvds> done </pvds>
>
> 3. The correct example DNS name is est-coaps.example.org not
> est-coaps.example.ietf.org. Please correct this. (See RFC 2606)
>
> <pvds> sorry about that, corrected that everywhere </pvds>
>
> 4. The query in section 5.1 to a resource directory is not correct. It
> would not go to /.well-known/core but to /rd-lookup (or what ever name is
> used by the RD). If this is not intended to be an RD query, then the
> sentence about it above can be omitted.
>
> <pvds> removed anchor because query to server and not RD </pvds>
>
> 5. Please remove the "anchor" target attribute from the response from the
> RD. I believe that this is no longer required and it is just adding noise
> without adding value. If this is intended to be from well-known then it is
> sufficient to have the anchor but not to have the authority section in the
> href.
>
> </est>;rt="ace.est";anchor="coaps://2001:db8::123]:61617"
>
> <pvds> Removed anchor, see above, but left the authority section because of
> port example. </pvds>
>
> 6. You have registered 282 and 283 as content types, however you also do
> not define anything that uses these types. Either some text about the
> content types needs to exist or potentially the registrations should be
> abandoned.
>
> <pvds>are needed for other future anima documents, but have them removed
> </pvds>
>
> 7. There is an outstanding review from Klaus that needs to be addressed.
>
> <pvds> we are working on it. will discuss answers to-morrow between authors
> </pvds>
>
> 8. There is still an open issue dealing with content types. I have
> requested that this be added to the agenda for the next CoRE interim
> meeting.
>
> <pvds> Absolutely. we hope for additional text elsewhere </pvds>
>
> Jim
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