Thanks Bill, Great to see so many detailed comments. I've offered to start working on this doc (including some open issues and PRs on Github ...) but due to other work this hasn't happened yet. We / authors should address these comments - maybe in a phased manner.
Regards Esko -----Original Message----- From: William Atwood <[email protected]> Sent: Tuesday, May 21, 2024 17:12 To: Anima WG <[email protected]> Subject: [Anima] Fwd: Review of draft-ietf-anima-constrained-join-proxy-15 Adding the anima list. -------- Forwarded Message -------- Subject: Review of draft-ietf-anima-constrained-join-proxy-15 Date: Tue, 16 Apr 2024 12:27:25 -0400 From: William Atwood <[email protected]> To: Michael Richardson <[email protected]>, Peter van der Stok <[email protected]>, Panos Kampanakis <[email protected]> Michael, Peter, Panos, I have done a review of constrained-join-proxy. I have a couple of technical questions, and a number of formatting/grammar suggestions. The questions and suggestions are indicated as comments in the attached PDF. Also attached is a separate PDF file that gives an explanation of why I have suggested replacing many instances of "which" with "that", along with some comments on other grammatical issues that occur more often when I am reviewing academic documents. I hope that these comments will be useful to you. Bill -- Dr. J.W. Atwood, Eng. tel: +1 (514) 848-2424 x3046 Distinguished Professor Emeritus fax: +1 (514) 848-2830 Department of Computer Science and Software Engineering Concordia University ER 1234 email:[email protected] 1455 de Maisonneuve Blvd. West http://users.encs.concordia.ca/~bill Montreal, Quebec Canada H3G 1M8 _______________________________________________ Anima mailing list -- [email protected] To unsubscribe send an email to [email protected]
