Hi Torsten,

Thank you for your approval. We have noted it on the AUTH48 status page:
https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9701

Once we receive Vladimir’s approval, we will move this document forward in the 
publication process.

Best regards,
RFC Editor/ap

> On Dec 8, 2024, at 7:49 AM, [email protected] wrote:
> 
> HI Alanna, 
> 
> thank you so much. 
> 
> I approve this revision for publication. 
> 
> best regards,  
> Torsten.
> Am 2. Dez. 2024, 19:32 +0100 schrieb Alanna Paloma <[email protected]>:
>> Hi Torsten,
>> 
>> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the files accordingly.
>> 
>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701.xml
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701.txt
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701.html
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701.pdf
>> 
>> The relevant diff files have been posted here:
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes)
>> 
>> Please review the document carefully and contact us with any further updates 
>> you may have. Note that we do not make changes once a document is published 
>> as an RFC.
>> 
>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status page 
>> below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process.
>> 
>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9701
>> 
>> Thank you,
>> RFC Editor/ap
>> 
>>> On Dec 1, 2024, at 2:51 AM, [email protected] wrote:
>>> 
>>> Hi,
>>> 
>>> please find my responses inline.
>>> 
>>> best regards,
>>> Torsten.
>>> Am 16. Nov. 2024, 22:13 +0100 schrieb [email protected]:
>>> Authors,
>>> 
>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) 
>>> the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
>>> 
>>> 1) <!--[rfced] FYI, the title of the document has been updated as
>>> follows. Abbreviations have been expanded per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322
>>> ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review.
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> JWT Response for OAuth Token Introspection
>>> 
>>> Current:
>>> JSON Web Token (JWT) Response for OAuth Token Introspection
>>> --> Ok.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 2) <!--[rfced] FYI, regarding the use of <tt> within this document, it 
>>> renders
>>> (using xml2rfc) in fixed-width font in the HTML and PDF files. However,
>>> the rendering of <tt> in the text file was changed in September 2021 -
>>> quotation marks are no longer added. When you review the diff file for
>>> this document, it will appear that the RPC removed quotation marks;
>>> however, actually this is due to the rendering change for <tt>.
>>> 
>>> (For details, see the release notes for v3.10.0 on
>>> https://github.com/ietf-tools/xml2rfc/blob/main/CHANGELOG.md)
>>> 
>>> Examples of where <tt> is used in the original (and remains):
>>> alg value, enc value
>>> Accept HTTP header field
>>> aud claim, token_introspection claim
>>> typ JWT header
>>> -->
>>> 
>>> I think this is acceptable.
>>> 
>>> 3) <!--[rfced] May we update this sentence as follows, to clarify the
>>> phrase "additional JSON Web Token (JWT) secured response"?
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> This specification proposes an additional JSON Web Token (JWT)
>>> secured response for OAuth 2.0 Token Introspection.
>>> 
>>> Perhaps:
>>> This specification proposes an additional response secured by
>>> JSON Web Token (JWT) for OAuth 2.0 Token Introspection.
>>> --> wfm
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 4) <!--[rfced] Please clarify the latter part of this sentence.
>>> What is "identifying it as subject" referring to?
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> Authentication can utilize client authentication methods
>>> or a separate access token issued to the resource server and
>>> identifying it as subject.
>>> 
>>> Perhaps (referring to the resource server):
>>> Authentication can utilize client authentication methods
>>> or a separate access token issued to the RS to
>>> identify the RS as the subject.
>>> 
>>> Or (also referring to the resource server):
>>> Authentication can utilize client authentication methods
>>> or a separate access token that is issued to the RS and
>>> identifies the RS as the subject.
>>> --> Please use this text.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 5) <!--[rfced] We are having some difficulty parsing this sentence,
>>> specifically "a dedicated containing JWT claim". How should
>>> it be updated?
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> The separation of the introspection response
>>> members into a dedicated containing JWT claim is intended to
>>> prevent conflict and confusion with top-level JWT claims that
>>> may bear the same name.
>>> 
>>> Perhaps:
>>> The separation of the introspection response
>>> members into a dedicated, contained JWT claim is intended to
>>> prevent conflict and confusion with top-level JWT claims that
>>> may bear the same name.
>>> --> It seems we missed one important word „JSON object“.
>>> 
>>> The separation of the introspection response
>>> members into a dedicated JSON object, containing JWT claim is intended to
>>> prevent conflict and confusion with top-level JWT claims that
>>> may bear the same name.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Please review whether any of the notes in this document
>>> should be in the <aside> element. It is defined as "a container for
>>> content that is semantically less important or tangential to the
>>> content that surrounds it" 
>>> (https://xml2rfc.tools.ietf.org/xml2rfc-doc.html#name-aside-2).
>>> --> Our notes are not less important than the rest of the text. It is more 
>>> like „please consider“.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 7) <!--[rfced] draft-ietf-oauth-security-topics (RFC-to-be 9700) does not
>>> have a Section 3.2. How this should be updated? Please
>>> see https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9700.html
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> Resource servers MUST additionally apply the countermeasures against
>>> replay as described in [I-D.ietf-oauth-security-topics], section 3.2.
>>> --> 3.2. has become 2.2. I would nevertheless change the text to referring 
>>> to the draft-ietf-oauth-security-topics (RFC-to-be 9700) more general and 
>>> frame the topic more precisely.
>>> 
>>> Here is my proposal:
>>> 
>>> Resource servers MUST additionally apply the countermeasures against
>>> access token replay as described in [I-D.ietf-oauth-security-topics].
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 8) <!--[rfced] RFC 7525 has been obsoleted by RFC 9325. Also,
>>> RFC 7525 is no longer part of BCP 195. How should this sentence
>>> be updated?
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> The authorization server MUST use Transport Layer Security (TLS) 1.2
>>> (or higher) per BCP 195 [RFC7525] in order to prevent token data
>>> leakage.
>>> 
>>> Perhaps (A), if simple replacement is accurate:
>>> The authorization server MUST use Transport Layer Security (TLS) 1.2
>>> (or higher) per BCP 195 [RFC9325] in order to prevent token data
>>> leakage. Please use this text.
>>> 
>>> Or (B), if referencing the whole BCP (RFC 8996 + RFC 9325) is accurate:
>>> The authorization server MUST use Transport Layer Security (TLS) 1.2
>>> (or higher) per [BCP195] in order to prevent token data leakage.
>>> -->
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 9) <!--[rfced] FYI, in Sections 10.1.1, 10.2.1, and 10.4.1,
>>> the change controller has been updated from "IESG" to "IETF" to match
>>> the actual IANA registries. This was noted as follows in the mail
>>> from IANA: "Note: in accordance with recent practice, the change controller
>>> for these registrations has been changed from the IESG to the IETF."
>>> 
>>> This is in keeping with IANA's "Guidance for RFC Authors" (on
>>> https://www.iana.org/help/protocol-registration):
>>> "The IESG shouldn't be listed as a change controller unless the RFC that
>>> created the registry (e.g. port numbers, XML namespaces and schemas)
>>> requires it. The IETF should be named instead."
>>> 
>>> We have also updated the change controller in Section 10.3.1 accordingly. I 
>>> guess you mean 11.3.1?
>>> If that is not accurate, please let us know.
>>> --> wfm
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 10) <!-- [rfced] For sourcecode elements, please consider whether the
>>> "type" attribute should be set and/or has been set correctly.
>>> 
>>> The current list of preferred values for "type" is available at
>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types>.
>>> If the current list does not contain an applicable type, feel free to
>>> suggest additions for consideration. Note that it is also acceptable
>>> to leave the "type" attribute not set.
>>> --> 1 and 2 -> http-message
>>> 3 and 4 -> json
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the 
>>> online
>>> Style Guide 
>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
>>> and let us know if any changes are needed. Updates of this nature typically
>>> result in more precise language, which is helpful for readers.
>>> 
>>> Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should
>>> still be reviewed as a best practice.
>>> -->
>>> 
>>> Thanks for bringing this to our attention. I reviewed the document using 
>>> the guidance given by the NIST documents and don’t see any issues with the 
>>> current text.
>>> 
>>> Thank you. Thank you for your hard work!
>>> 
>>> RFC Editor/ap/ar
>>> 
>>> 
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>>> 
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>>> 
>>> Updated 2024/11/16
>>> 
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>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701.pdf
>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9701.txt
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>>> 
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>>> Thank you for your cooperation,
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>>> RFC Editor
>>> 
>>> --------------------------------------
>>> RFC9701 (draft-ietf-oauth-jwt-introspection-response-12)
>>> 
>>> Title : JWT Response for OAuth Token Introspection
>>> Author(s) : T. Lodderstedt, Ed., V. Dzhuvinov
>>> WG Chair(s) : Hannes Tschofenig, Rifaat Shekh-Yusef
>>> Area Director(s) : Deb Cooley, Paul Wouters
>>> 
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