Hi Sarah, Apologies for the delay.
Here you have my comments, please see in-line with [jorge]. Thanks very much for your work on this. Jorge From: [email protected] <[email protected]> Date: Tuesday, August 19, 2025 at 11:05 AM To: Jorge Rabadan (Nokia) <[email protected]>, Jayant Kotalwar (Nokia) <[email protected]>, Senthil Sathappan (Nokia) <[email protected]>, [email protected] <[email protected]>, [email protected] <[email protected]> Cc: [email protected] <[email protected]>, [email protected] <[email protected]>, [email protected] <[email protected]>, [email protected] <[email protected]>, Gunter van de Velde (Nokia) <[email protected]>, [email protected] <[email protected]> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9856 <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-redundant-mcast-source-15> for your review CAUTION: This is an external email. Please be very careful when clicking links or opening attachments. See the URL nok.it/ext for additional information. Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Would you like the references to be alphabetized or left in their current order? --> [jorge] yes, please 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> [jorge] Warm standby, hot standby, OISM, redundant G-source, SFG, Single Flow Group 3) <!-- [rfced] We have removed "(IP DA)" as the abbreviation does not seem to be used in this document. DA (by itself) also does not appear. Elsewhere, the text refers to "destination IP address". Are these the same? Should the definition for G-traffic be updated for consistency? Original: * G-traffic: any frame with an IP payload whose IP Destination Address (IP DA) is a multicast group G. Perhaps: G-traffic: Any frame with an IP payload whose destination IP address is a multicast group G. [jorge] your suggestion is good --> 4) <!-- [rfced] Should "destinated" be "destined? Original: In these scenarios, the upstream PE pushes the S-ESI labels on packets not only destinated for PEs sharing the ES but also for all PEs within the tenant domain. --> [jorge] yes, it should be “destined” 5) <!-- [rfced] Since RFC 9573 uses the term "Context-Specific Label Space ID Extended Community" rather than "Context Label Space ID Extended Community", may we update to match? Note this would also update the following terms to the term on the right: context label spaces > context-specific label spaces context label space ID > context-specific label space ID --> [jorge] yes, I agree it should match 6) <!-- [rfced] Should "Flag" be part of the name? The other registered values do not include "Flag". It seems redundant, since it is a registry of flags. If "Flag" is to be removed, we will ask IANA to update their registry accordingly. Original Table 2: +=====+==============+===============+ | Bit | Name | Reference | +=====+==============+===============+ | 5 | ESI-DCB Flag | This Document | --> [jorge] yes, it is redundant, it can be suppressed if you want. 7) <!-- [rfced] Throughout the text, several abbreviations are introduced but not used or are repeatedly defined. Please consider whether the abbreviated form should be used in most cases once the term has been introduced. For example: Attachment Circuit (AC) Assisted Replication (AR) Bit Indexed Explicit Replication (BIER) Domain-wide Common Block (DCB) Designated Forwarder (DF) Ethernet Segment (ES) Ethernet Segment Identifier (ESI) Inclusive Multicast Ethernet Tag (IMET) Ingress Replication (IR) Supplementary Broadcast Domain (SBD) Supplementary Broadcast Domain Route Target (SBD-RT) Selective Multicast Ethernet Tag (SMET) --> [jorge] yes, once introduced, the abbreviated form can be used 8) <!-- [rfced] Throughout the text, the following terminology appears to be capitalized inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and let us know if/how they may be made consistent. Downstream vs. downstream ESI Label vs. ESI label Upstream vs. upstream --> [jorge] we should use “downstream”, “ESI label” and “upstream” consistently if possible. 9) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. Updates of this nature typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for readers. Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a best practice. --> [jorge] I didn’t find any word that could be replaced.. [jorge] in addition, could you please make the following change (it should be “multicast” and not “multicasts”?: CURRENT (in the edited version) In conventional IP multicast networks, such as those running Protocol Independent Multicasts (PIMs) [RFC7761<https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9856.html#RFC7761>] NEW In conventional IP multicast networks, such as those running Protocol Independent Multicast (PIM) [RFC7761<https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9856.html#RFC7761>] Thank you! Jorge Thank you. Sarah Tarrant and Sandy Ginoza RFC Production Center On Aug 19, 2025, at 10:59 AM, [email protected] wrote: *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2025/08/19 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. Once it has been reviewed and approved by you and all coauthors, it will be published as an RFC. If an author is no longer available, there are several remedies available as listed in the FAQ (https://www.rfc-editor.org/faq/). 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