Authors,

While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) 
the following questions, which are also in the source file.

1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in
the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. -->


2) <!-- [rfced] Capitalization for some of the TLV descriptions do not 
match the IANA registry.  Should these match?  It wasn't clear to us if you 
intentionally chose initial capitalization for all descriptions, regardless 
of what appears in the RFCs/registries. 

Examples: 
IANA  vs  document 

IS-IS Router CAPABILITY TLV  vs  Router Capability TLV
  (though "IS-IS Router CAPABILITY TLV" appears once in Section 7)

Extended IS reachability  vs  Extended IS Reachability
  (outside of the IANA table)
-->


3) <!-- [rfced] Presumably, the mechanism defined in this document would 
not be needed if the mechanims defined by RFC 7356 were backwards 
compatible (i.e., the existence of RFC 7356 does not resolve the problem).  
For clarity, we suggest the update below.  Please review and clarify as 
needed. 

Original:
   [RFC7356] has defined a 16-bit length field for TLVs in flooding
   scoped Protocol Data Units (PDUs), in which case the problem
   addressed by this document would not exist.  However, introduction of
   these new PDU types is not backwards compatible.  Therefore, there is
   a need to address how to expand the information advertised in
   existing PDUs that use 8-bit length TLVs.

Perhaps:
   [RFC7356] has defined a 16-bit length field for TLVs in flooding
   scoped Protocol Data Units (PDUs), but it is not backwards 
   compatible.  Therefore, there remains a need to address how to 
   expand the information advertised in PDUs that use 8-bit TLVs.
-->


4) <!-- [rfced] The text indicates that this mechanism is to be used in 
cases where no extension was previously specified and is to be used with 
future TLVs.  Assuming "future TLVs" refers to only the TLVs with 8-bit 
TLVs, we suggest the following update.  Please review. 

Original:
   This document specifies a means for extending TLVs where no extension
   mechanism has been previously explicitly specified, and defines this
   mechanism as the default extension mechanism for future TLVs.

Perhaps:
   This document specifies a means for extending TLVs where no extension
   mechanism has been previously explicitly specified, and defines this
   mechanism as the default extension mechanism for future TLVs with an 
   8-bit length field. 
-->


5) <!-- [rfced] For clarity, may we update the text as follows?  

Original: 
   Some TLVs support advertisement of objects of a given type, where
   each object is identified by a unique set of identifiers.  In this
   case the "key" that uniquely identifies a given object consists of
   the set of identifiers.

Perhaps:
   Some TLVs support advertisement of objects of a given type, where
   each object is identified by a unique set of identifiers, which is 
   referred to as a "key". 
-->


6) <!-- [rfced] We added articles in Sections 3.2.1 and 3.2.2.  Please 
review and let us know if any corrections are needed. 
-->


7) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble parsing "transient" as a noun.  
Perhaps this should read "a transient issue" or "a transient error"? 

Original:
   Note that this can occur either legitimately as a
   transient when a TLV moves from one LSP to another or as a result of
   a defect in the sending implementation.
-->


8) <!-- [rfced] Please review whether any of the notes in this document
should be in the <aside> element. It is defined as "a container for 
content that is semantically less important or tangential to the 
content that surrounds it" 
(https://authors.ietf.org/en/rfcxml-vocabulary#aside).
-->


9) <!-- [rfced] We wonder if the following update would help with 
readability. 

Original:
   The
   receiving router must then process this as having key information K
   and unique sub-TLVs A, B, C, D, E, F, or, because ordering is
   irrelevant, unique sub-TLVs D, E, F, A, B, C, or any other
   permutation.

Perhaps - splitting this into two sentences:
   The
   receiving router must then process this as having key information K
   and unique sub-TLVs A, B, C, D, E, F.  Because ordering is
   irrelevant, the sub-TLVs may appear in any order (e.g., D, E, F, A, B, C). 
-->


10) <!-- [rfced] We have updated the format of artwork in Section 7.  
Please let us know if you have any concerns. 

Original:
   MP-TLV Support for TLVs with implicit support

   Type 30 (suggested - to be assigned by IANA)    1 octet
   Length 0                                        1 octet

Current:
   MP-TLV Support for TLVs with implicit support

   Type:  30 (1 octet)
   Length:  0 (1 octet)
-->


11) <!-- [rfced] Please consider whether "per level" will be clear for the 
reader. 

Original:
   Scope of the associated Router Capability TLV is per level (S-bit
   clear).
-->


12) <!-- [rfced] Please consider whether "implicit support" should be 
capitalized - that is, how should it appear in other documents that refer 
to this TLV?  Note that we will ask IANA to update their registry as 
needed. 

   MP-TLV Support for TLVs with implicit support
-->


13) <!-- [rfced] Note that we have removed the URLs from each of the 
subsections in Section 9.2.  The URLs would need to be reduced to the URL 
for the main registry group per IANA guidance, which is already mentioned 
in Section 9.2.  We did not include any introductory text for the tables 
because the registry names are part of the section titles and table titles.  
Please review and let us know if you prefer that introductory text be 
added. 
-->


14) <!-- [rfced] We removed "TLV" from these entries to match what appears 
in the IANA registry. 

126     IPv4 Algorithm Prefix Reachability TLV  N
127     IPv6 Algorithm Prefix Reachability TLV  N
-->


15) <!-- [rfced] Table 4: Note that we updated the Unassigned values to be 
33-255, as value 32 is assigned to "BIER Info".

Original:
         | 32     | BIER Info                               | Y  |
         | 32-255 | Unassigned                              |    |
-->


16) <!-- [rfced] We believe it is intentional that value 30, assigned to 
"MP-TLV Support for TLVs with implicit support" in this document, is not 
listed in Table 6.  Please let us know if this is incorrect. 

Original:
           | 30-160  | Unassigned                         |    |

-->


17) <!-- [rfced] Note that we have updated the Description for Type 9 in 
Table 13 to match what appears in the IANA registry.

Original:
       | 9      | IS-IS Threshold Metric                     | N  |

Current:
       | 9      | IS-IS Bandwidth Metric                     | N  |
-->


18) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the 
online Style Guide 
<https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
and let us know if any changes are needed.  Updates of this nature 
typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for readers.

Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should 
still be reviewed as a best practice.
-->


Thank you.
Sandy Ginoza
RFC Production Center


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RFC 9885 (draft-ietf-lsr-multi-tlv-19)

Title            : Multi-Part TLVs in IS-IS
Author(s)        : P. Kaneriya, T. Li, A. Przygienda, S. Hegde, L. Ginsberg
WG Chair(s)      : Acee Lindem, Christian Hopps, Yingzhen Qu

Area Director(s) : Jim Guichard, Ketan Talaulikar, Gunter Van de Velde


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