These changes all look fine to me. Regarding the line break in Figure 1, I would shift the line break by the smallest amount needed to fit within the character limit.
--Ben ________________________________ From: Erik Nygren <[email protected]> Sent: Tuesday, December 23, 2025 11:01 AM To: [email protected] <[email protected]> Cc: [email protected] <[email protected]>; [email protected] <[email protected]>; [email protected] <[email protected]>; [email protected] <[email protected]>; [email protected] <[email protected]>; [email protected] <[email protected]>; [email protected] <[email protected]> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9848 <draft-ietf-tls-svcb-ech-08> for your review Responses inline below. On Fri, Dec 12, 2025 at 5: 32 PM <rfc-editor@ rfc-editor. org> wrote: Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the source file. Responses inline below. On Fri, Dec 12, 2025 at 5:32 PM <[email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>> wrote: Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the source file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search<https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/search__;!!Bt8RZUm9aw!-i4DIuXJKYb7uTdw8dSAtilUPfTq3FOc-0cEH2bHL-YlHKXYsSWr7Tul-fl_mYrQLXkAJrPzQjADeKs$>. --> Some proposed keywords: "ech SvcParamKey" "ech SvcParam" "ECH" "SVCB" "HTTPS Resource Records" "TLS SNI" "Encrypted SNI" "Server Name Indication" "Encrypted Server Name Indication" 2) <!--[rfced] FYI - We moved the second sentence in the title of Figure 2 out of the title. It now directly follows the figure. Please review and let us know of any objections. Original: Figure 2: Simple example zone with the same configuration on the apex and web domain. It is compatible with clients that do or do not support HTTPS records. Current: Figure 2: Simple Example Zone with the Same Configuration on the Apex and Web Domain The example above is compatible with clients that do or do not support HTTPS records. --> Fine with me 3) <!-- [rfced] Figures 1 and 3 are too long for the line limit of the text output (72 characters in the text, which means 69 characters within the sourcecode element in the XML file). Please let us know how these figures should be updated. a) Figure 1 - perhaps break at the "/" Original: ech="AEj+DQBEAQAgACAdd+scUi0IYFsXnUIU7ko2Nd9+F8M26pAGZVpz/KrWPgAEAAEAAWQ VZWNoLXNpdGVzLmV4YW1wbGUubmV0AAA=" Perhaps: ech="AEj+DQBEAQAgACAdd+scUi0IYFsXnUIU7ko2Nd9+F8M26pAGZVpz/ KrWPgAEAAEAAWQVZWNoLXNpdGVzLmV4YW1wbGUubmV0AAA=" Hm. Unfortunately the referenced RFC doesn't allow for line breaks within a string and the whole point of the example is that escape characters aren't allowed. If we put a newline there we likely need to clearly indicate that in the caption such as with ("Note that there is no newline after the "/" in this example.") Other authors? b) Figure 3 - perhaps change "two" to "2" Original: $ORIGIN heterogeneous.example. ; Example zone with two pools of servers Perhaps: $ORIGIN heterogeneous.example. ; Example zone with 2 pools of servers --> Fine with me 4) <!-- [rfced] We updated <artwork> to <sourcecode> in the figures in this document. Currently, the "type" attribute is not set. Please review the types at https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types<https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types__;!!Bt8RZUm9aw!-i4DIuXJKYb7uTdw8dSAtilUPfTq3FOc-0cEH2bHL-YlHKXYsSWr7Tul-fl_mYrQLXkAJrPz14BX8v8$>, and let us know if one is applicable. If the list does not contain an applicable type, then feel free to let us know. Also, it is acceptable to leave the "type" attribute not set. 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Thank you for your cooperation, RFC Editor -------------------------------------- RFC9848 (draft-ietf-tls-svcb-ech-08) Title : Bootstrapping TLS Encrypted ClientHello with DNS Service Bindings Author(s) : B. Schwartz, M. Bishop, E. Nygren WG Chair(s) : Joseph A. Salowey, Sean Turner, Deirdre Connolly Area Director(s) : Deb Cooley, Paul Wouters
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