Hello, I'd like to suggest that you develop a marketing plan first, if you haven't already. If you have, what this letter needs to reflect is how your idea of coworking space fulfills a new market need. The letter below will be unclear to anyone who isn't familiar with the concept.
-Allyson Saad On Wed, Oct 8, 2008 at 3:07 PM, Karen Origlio <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > Hi Jodi, > > I have some experience editing and can provide feedback. > I'll send you suggestions in a Word doc off-list. > > Congrats on your exciting plans! > > Karen > > On Oct 3, 12:29 pm, JDean <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > I would like feedback on my cover letter to potential investors. > > > > Downtown Fort Wayne is in the critical crossroads of revitalization. > > In the past three years there has been a strong momentum to add new > > restaurants, sports facilities, small retailers and technology > > businesses have been added the current mix. In that same time frame, > > the central core of Fort Wayne has lost a number of entities, > > including accounting firms, law practices and investment corporations. > > Additional private firms may relocate due to today's technological > > advances. Therefore in this frequent shift of individuals within the > > central core, there must be a strong focus on building a critical mass > > to redensify the area and allow for sustainability. > > > > OurSpace Fort Wayne will be coworking site, in downtown, that is > > planned to to open in Spring, 2009. Coworking is a movement to > > create cafe-like community/collaboration spaces for entrepreneurs, > > innovators, developers, writers and others. Although no specific site > > has been selected, it is believed that the workspace will have room > > for 30 members per day; a minimum of 45 individuals will use the site > > per week. Along with a space for work, members will have access to a > > lounge/kitchen, private offices and conference facilities. > > > > To ensure that OurSpace is successful, your assistance is needed. > > OurSpace will developed with funds from private investors who believe > > in utilizing innovation, ingenuity and creativy to revitalize and > > build critical mass in Fort Wayne's central core . In addition, > > OurSpace is currently seeking potential members that would benefit > > from the space's offerings. Finally, OurSpace is procuring > > partnerships that will assist members grow and sustain their business, > > balance work and life and maintain a active lifestyle. > > > > Enclosed in this packet of information is an executive summary of the > > plan and membership rates. A full business plan is available upon > > request. To obtain additional information or a business plan please > > contact Jodi Dean, OurSpace founder, at number. > > > --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Coworking" group. To post to this group, send email to coworking@googlegroups.com To unsubscribe from this group, send email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/coworking?hl=en -~----------~----~----~----~------~----~------~--~---
