On Thursday 11 September 2008, Jérémy Bobbio wrote: > > +++ b/manual/en/hardware/supported/i386.xml > > -in IBM's PS/2 line), or VESA Local Bus (VLB, sometimes > > called the VL -bus). Essentially all personal computers sold in > > recent years use one -of these. > > +must use the ISA, EISA, PCI, PCIe. Essentially all personal > > computers sold in +recent years use one of these. > > > > FJP: Are the other busses definitely no longer supported? If they > > still are I think there should be a second para mentioning them. > > As far as I have found, they are not mentioned in current kernel > configuration files.
drivers/ata/Kconfig: This option enables support for ISA/VLB bus legacy PATA drivers/eisa/Kconfig: Bus (VLB) card that identify itself as an EISA card (such as > As far as I understand, SATA is based on the ATA (also called IDE) > command set, so Serial ATA devices are actually IDE devices. To mark > the difference with the previous connectors which use _p_arallel > signaling, those are called PATA. Right. The problem in your new proposed patches is that you lump SATA together with SCSI which IMO is not correct. From a hardware PoV it is AIIU much more logical to group PATA and SATA together as two IDE-based technologies and leave SCSI somewhat separate. I understand where the feeling to have SATA and SCSI together comes from (mainly probably IDE=hdX, SATA/SCSI=sdX), but that does not make it correct. Especially since "old" IDE or PATA is now also sdX. > Except that the previous term never got caught by hardware resellers, > at least in my area. They call newer devices SATA and older IDE. No, but users will start seeing (p)ata_XXX drivers being used for their IDE devices... > In any cases, here's an updated version mentioning PATA as well: s/cases/case/ ;-) > > Emphase that not all CDs are DVDs are needed. > > > > FJP: 'Emphasize' ? ^^^ > *ahem* that was en_FR. Fixed. > > Emphazise that not all CDs are DVDs are needed. ^^^ Hmm. Dyslexia? > +++ b/manual/en/install-methods/official-cdrom.xml I still feel that the text is perfectly clear without the added <emphasis>. > +++ b/manual/en/using-d-i/using-d-i.xml This really needs a much more fundamental rewrite. In fact, an explanation of the frontends should IMO not be in chapter 5, but much earlier in the manual (a rewritten chapter 2 or 3). > @@ -56,11 +56,17 @@ they are installed, you will need to start the > installer in the boot argument <userinput>priority=low</userinput>. > Expert mode gives you full control over &d-i;. > > +</para><para condition="gtk"> > + > +When selected during the initial boot menu, a graphical interface can > be used +to perform the installation. For more information about the > graphical +installer, please refer to <xref linkend="graphical"/>. > + I would make this something like: </para><para condition="gtk"> For this architecture the &d-i; supports two different user interfaces: a character-based one and a graphical one. The character-based interface is used by default unless you selected the <quote>Graphical install</quote> option in the initial boot menu. For more information ... </para><para condition="not-gtk"> For this architecture the installer uses a character-based user interface. A graphical user interface is currently not available. </para><para> These first sentences can then be dropped (it does not make sense anyway): > -The usual installer display is character-based (as opposed to the now > -more familiar graphical interface). The mouse is not operational in > -this environment. And replaced by something like: In the character-based environment the use of a mouse is not supported. > Would the following be better? [...] > <xref linkend="partitioning" /> has more information about partitioning. > +For more details on how to use the partitioner, please refer to > +<xref linkend="partman-manual" />. Why not just refer to the whole para (link: di-partition) instead? I would say: For more detailed information on how to use the partitioner, please refer to <xref linkend="di-partition" />; the appendix <xref linkend="partitioning" /> has more general information about partitioning.
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