Package: debian-handbook Version: 6.0+20120509 Severity: minor Hi Raphaël, I've just finished reading chapter 8: here's the usual list of proposed modifications, grouped by relevant section.
Section 8.1.1. Seing the Default Language ----------------------------------------- | representationfor Typo? s/representationfor/representation for/ Section 8.1.3. Migrating to UTF-8 --------------------------------- | all over the world over I am not sure whether this is a typo: maybe s/world over/world/ ? Section 8.2. Configuring the Network ------------------------------------ | e is the name of the bits affected by the network part Typo? s/the name of/the number of/ Section 8.2.3.1. Modems Supporting PPPOE ---------------------------------------- | Since they are not billed according to time, Well, this is not always true: at least down here, in Italy, some providers also offer ADSL connections that are billed on a time basis (sad, but true...). Hence, for generalility's sake, I would rephrase the above sentence as follows: + Since in most cases they are not billed according to time, Section 8.2.4. Automatic Network Configuration for Roaming Users ---------------------------------------------------------------- I think that another alternative to be mentioned in the "Alternative" box is wicd: it's similar to Network Manager, but more desktop-agnostic and more lightweight (with less dependencies). Section 8.4.5. Group List: /etc/group ------------------------------------- | The groupadd and groupdel commands add or delete a group, respectively. Why not suggest the higher level addgroup and delgroup commands? Section 8.5. Creating Accounts ------------------------------ | (see sidebar "Peripheral access permissions"). I think it is actually titled "Device access permissions" ... Section 8.8.1. Identifying the Disks ------------------------------------ | of the the first Repeated word: s/the the/the/ Sections 8.9.2.1. For Workstations and 8.9.2.2. For Servers ----------------------------------------------------------- Another interesting package that could be suggested (for both workstations and servers) is chrony. Section 8.11.1. Features of a Debian Kernel Package --------------------------------------------------- | The symbols table table helps Repetition: s/table table/table/ | an "oops" is the kernel equivalent in the kernel of a segmentation fault | for user space programs Repetition: s/the kernel equivalent in the kernel/the kernel equivalent/ -- To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to debian-bugs-dist-requ...@lists.debian.org with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact listmas...@lists.debian.org
