Package: cortina
Version: 0.7.3-1
Severity: wishlist
Tags: patch

The package description for cortina contains several fairly trivial
typos and language errors.  Currently:

> Description: Wallpaper changer for gnome

DevRef recommends not capitalising the first word of the synopsis,
whereas GNOME on the other hand should be all-caps.  But this isn't a
great short description for cortina anyway, since it undersells its
capabilities.  Even xsetroot can claim to be a wallpaper changer; it
would make more sense for cortina to use the upstream description
"desktop wallpaper management application for GNOME".

>  Cortina can rotate wallpapers by time and works as an tray application

s/an tray/a tray/, but rotating wallpapers by time makes it sound
vaguely as if it performs 90° image rotations in the fourth dimension
or something.  What you mean is that it can cycle through wallpaper
images at a specified interval.

>  with an configuration interface. Is a simple wallpaper changer for GNOME 

Again s/an/a/, and a missing article before GNOME.

>  desktop, lightweight and perform all its task quicky and swiftly.

Word salad, with a typo (s/quicky/quickly) and a meaningless
repetition (it's quick *and* swift?) - reorganise it as "simple,
lightweight, and fast-working".  But this basic intro should have come
first, with the details about tray apps coming second.

So that's:

| Description: desktop wallpaper management application for GNOME
|  Cortina is a simple, lightweight, and fast-working wallpaper changer for
|  the GNOME desktop. It can cycle through wallpapers at a specified
|  interval, and works as a tray application with a configuration interface.

-- 
JBR
Ankh kak! (Ancient Egyptian blessing)
diff -ru cortina-0.7.3.pristine/debian/control cortina-0.7.3/debian/control
--- cortina-0.7.3.pristine/debian/control	2011-06-29 04:33:28.000000000 +0100
+++ cortina-0.7.3/debian/control	2012-07-07 14:48:11.371392634 +0100
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@
 Package: cortina
 Architecture: any
 Depends: ${shlibs:Depends}, ${misc:Depends}, gconf2 (>= 2.28)
-Description: Wallpaper changer for gnome
- Cortina can rotate wallpapers by time and works as an tray application
- with an configuration interface. Is a simple wallpaper changer for GNOME 
- desktop, lightweight and perform all its task quicky and swiftly.
+Description: desktop wallpaper management application for GNOME
+ Cortina is a simple, lightweight, and fast-working wallpaper changer for
+ the GNOME desktop. It can cycle through wallpapers at a specified
+ interval, and works as a tray application with a configuration interface.

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