Thanks for this, Will make changes then upload the source to salsa.github.com.
Paul On 09/05/2019 17:36, Miroslav Kravec wrote: > Hi, > > I took a quick look at the presentation. Looks to have nice potential > in it. Few points below: > >> Debian GNU/Linux is a free (as in freedom) operating system (OS) for your >> computer. An operating system is the set of basic programs and utilities >> that make your computer run. [1] > Less (text) is more (focused presentation). I would remove part > describing what OS is, and based on audience, would explain the term > only orally (plus hyperlink in PDF). > > I would also try to restructure "A brief definition" to get rid of > repetition of "Debian" on each bullet point. > >> Internet Relay Chat > In 2019 the most of the people know, what chat is (or quickly > explained it orally). I would merge these three points to one "A real > time Text based Communication system", and focus on IRC pros and > differences. > >> :- > For me, this looks a bit ugly. > >> On a basic level it is:- > I would remove this sentence at all, and reword titles: > > * What is Internet Relay Chat, > * What is ID with nickserv, > > Also, I would move registration after definition, and renamed title to: > > * Registration of ID with nickserv > > Generally, I would first focus on the message to be told, and to whom. > Presentations are highly specific. And, people tend to get easily > bored, when there's too much details they already know, or are not > relevant to message. Also, people get bored, if they lose track on > some point, because of missing information. In either case, they'll > disconnect themselves, and will start day dreaming, or anti-social > ones will start disturbing others/speaker. > > Kind regards, > Miroslav Kravec > > On Thu, May 9, 2019 at 5:24 PM Paul Sutton <zl...@disroot.org> wrote: >> Hi >> >> Having worked on a presentation to promote Debian generally, I decided >> to work on one that could focus on IRC and how to get started. >> >> https://salsa.debian.org/zleap-guest/oftc-presentation >> >> I am not sure if this is useful, but I would anticipate this can form >> part of a series on getting started with Debian contributing. It is >> early days on this at the moment but I am getting there slowly. >> >> I am not going to touch on IRC clients other than the web interface, >> once people are connected to IRC they are able to ask for further help >> and information on clients. >> >> Hope this helps >> >> >> Paul Sutton >> >> >> -- >> Paul Sutton >> http://www.zleap.net >> https://www.linkedin.com/in/zleap/ >> gnupg : 7D6D B682 F351 8D08 1893 1E16 F086 5537 D066 302D >> -- Paul Sutton http://www.zleap.net https://www.linkedin.com/in/zleap/ gnupg : 7D6D B682 F351 8D08 1893 1E16 F086 5537 D066 302D