Dear Daniel, Thanks a lot for your review. Please see some comments inline below.
On Thu, 2018-03-15 at 21:37 +0000, Daniel Corujo wrote: > Dear Carlos, all, > > Just wanted to point out, and congratulate all authors, on a document > well done: the partial schemes provide a clear mechanism for > maintaining connectivity while distributing control and data plane > aspects. Even though it’s a -01, it already shows good form by > pointing out the necessary extensions to RFC 5213’s messages (I would > recommend this part to have it’s own section on the document), [Carlos] OK, we'll evaluate this change of structure for -02. > complemented with an interesting set of annexes showcasing > implementation details, past experiences and even an on-look on > future adaptability with edge-based mobility (we can even potentially > bring some ideas to this discussion ourselves for consideration). > > Some quick typos to be fixed: > > * pg4, 3rd paragraph, line 2, “where the dataplane is only > distributted” > * pg5, last paragraph, line 1, “participate” > * pg8, 2nd paragraph, 6th line from the end, “the CMD sends a PBA” > * pg10, 1st paragraph, line 3 “reflects” > * pg11, 1st paragraph, line 4 “possession” > * pg15, 1st paragraph, 6th line from the end, “interface” > * pg15, 3rd paragraph, 5th line from the end, “considered” [Carlos] Thanks. We'll fix them all for -02. Thanks! Carlos > > Best regards, > > Daniel Corujo > Instituto de Telecomunicações - Pólo de Aveiro > http://www.it.pt > > > > Watch our VIDEO: https://youtu.be/lI8DnmBnEtU > Internet Technology Letters Journal is accepting publications: http:/ > /onlinelibrary.wiley.com/journal/10.1002/(ISSN)2476-1508 > > > On 12 Mar 2018, at 17:02, Carlos Jesús Bernardos Cano <cjbc@it.uc3m > > .es> wrote: > > > > Hi Akbar, > > > > Thanks for the review. Comments inline below. > > > > On Mon, 2018-03-12 at 16:41 +0000, Rahman, Akbar wrote: > > > Hi Carlos, > > > > > > > > > Thanks for the updates. I think the document is in good shape > > > and > > > should be adopted. > > > > > > I did have some small suggestions though for the next revision: > > > > > > 1) Abstract - Suggest to remove the last paragraph on > > > "distributed > > > logical interface" as it appears to be a detail and is not very > > > clear > > > anyways at this point in the document what it implies. If you > > > want > > > to keep the paragraph it should be further clarified as it is not > > > clear what "a software construct" implies? > > > > [Carlos] OK, well clarify this further. > > > > > 2) Figures 2, 3, & 4 - Suggest to replace use of the "?" in the > > > ASCII figure construction with another symbol (such as used in > > > Figure > > > 1). > > > > [Carlos] This will be fixed in -02. > > > > > 3) Section 3.6 - Need to better clarify in the 1st paragraph text > > > in > > > which node the "software construct" of the DLIF is located. And > > > also, not clear currently why a node internal software construct > > > needs to be discussed in a protocol document. So probably just > > > my > > > lack of understanding but points to the section requiring further > > > clarity. > > > > [Carlos] Will clarify in -02. > > > > Thanks! > > > > Carlos > > > > > > > > Best Regards, > > > > > > Akbar > > > > > > > > > -----Original Message----- > > > From: Sri Gundavelli (sgundave) [mailto:sgund...@cisco.com] > > > Sent: Wednesday, March 7, 2018 10:21 AM > > > To: c...@it.uc3m.es; dmm@ietf.org > > > Subject: Re: [DMM] [Fwd: I-D Action: draft-bernardos-dmm-pmipv6- > > > dlif- > > > 01.txt] > > > > > > Thanks Carlos. > > > > > > Folks - Please review the document and post your feedback. > > > > > > https://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-bernardos-dmm-pmipv6-dlif-01.txt > > > > > > > > > > > > At IETF100, we polled the WG feedback for adopting this document > > > and > > > there was consensus for adopting this document. However, we chose > > > not > > > to adopt the document as there were no recent discussions in the > > > mailer on this document. We therefore request the WG for feedback > > > in > > > the mailer. We plan to issue an adoption call post IETF101, but > > > we > > > need some feedback and substantial comments. > > > > > > > > > Dapeng & Sri > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > On 3/6/18, 2:17 PM, "dmm on behalf of Carlos Jesús Bernardos > > > Cano" > > > <dmm-boun...@ietf.org on behalf of c...@it.uc3m.es> wrote: > > > > > > > Hi, > > > > > > > > We have submitted a revised version of our draft addressing the > > > > comments we got in Singapore: > > > > > > > > - Added some statements about which model from draft-ietf-dmm- > > > > deployment-models our solution follows (addressing a comment > > > > received > > > > from Sri). > > > > - Added some text relating to draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility > > > > (addressing a comment received from Danny). > > > > > > > > Additionally, we added some terminology from draft-ietf-dmm- > > > > deployment- > > > > models and other minor changes. > > > > > > > > In Singapore we got quite good support of the document. I'd > > > > like to > > > > request feedback/reviews from the WG. > > > > > > > > Thanks! > > > > > > > > Carlos > > > > > > [Banner] > > > This e-mail is intended only for the use of the individual or > > > entity > > > to which it is addressed, and may contain information that is > > > privileged, confidential and/or otherwise protected from > > > disclosure > > > to anyone other than its intended recipient. Unintended > > > transmission > > > shall not constitute waiver of any privilege or confidentiality > > > obligation. If you received this communication in error, please > > > do > > > not review, copy or distribute it, notify me immediately by > > > email, > > > and delete the original message and any attachments. 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