Pretty heavy cross-posting here, could you perhaps reign this in to the freebsd-jail@ list, where it can be discussed in-context? This will help keep the noise down.
On Mar 18, 2013, at 12:57 PM, Fbsd8 wrote: > To all interested parties; > > I have completed the final draft of the total rewrite of FreeBSD's handbook > Chapter 16 on Jails. > > Before submitting my work for submission to the documentation group for > insertion in the handbook I am looking for critique of the work to find > errors in concept, wrong use of words, or anything to make it better. > > All feedback welcomed. > > Use this URL to access it http://www.jails.a1poweruser.com/ > > > Thank You. Wow, overall that's really quite cool. - Do you have a rough timeframe for when you want feedback? (I would like to give this the time it deserves). -- Feedback right off the bat, (please tell me if I'm off track here): - After a short skim- I do not believe the qjail utilities referenced are appropriate for the FreeBSD handbook. There are many 3rd party approaches to handling/managing jails, some of them with quite long histories and loyal user bases- it is impractical and not appropriate to try to cover any/all of them here. - The "Jail Cell" vocabulary is a serious departure- and may create some confusion- I'll read thoroughly to get your context right. In what I understand to be the majority of uses, it's confusing to think of the hardware host as the 'jail' and the jailed instance as the 'cell'. - The references and history cite some works, but do not cite the original (and possibly most important) document on jailing, http://docs.freebsd.org/44doc/papers/jail/jail.ps.gz - There are a number of common lexical errors right off the bat, (There instead of Their), etc… -- I look foreword to reading this on my subway commute this week- Best, .ike _______________________________________________ freebsd-current@freebsd.org mailing list http://lists.freebsd.org/mailman/listinfo/freebsd-current To unsubscribe, send any mail to "freebsd-current-unsubscr...@freebsd.org"
