I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-shacham-sipping-session-mobility-04.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2007-09-20 IETF LC End Date: done IESG Telechat date: on next agenda Summary: Ready Comments: I have a few editorial comments: - ToC page 2 and 11 page 32: s/Acknowledgements/Acknowledgments/ - 1 page 4: s/teh/the/ - 3 page 5: s/SLP [18]Directory/SLP [18] Directory/ - 4 page 6: s/search e.g.,/search, e.g.,/ ? - 5.2 page 9: please expand the "AOR" abbrev at its first use. - 5.3.1.2 page 13: s/active endpoint, opening/active endpoint [by] opening/ ? - 5.4.1 page 18 and some others: some too long lines in the examples - 5.4.1 page 19: s/5.3.2/5.4.2/ ? (note this is the only one which is not at 100% in the scope of the RFC Editor, so please check) Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
