Thanks for the review, Francis. Please see my comments below. PatC
-----Original Message----- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] Sent: Friday, July 11, 2008 1:27 AM To: gen-art@ietf.org Cc: Pat Calhoun (pacalhou); [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: review of draft-ietf-capwap-dhc-ac-option-01.txt I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-capwap-dhc-ac-option-01.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-07-10 IETF LC End Date: 2008-07-14 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready with nits Comments: I have two general questions and the usual editioral things (here editorial means they can be handled by the RFC Editor): - the first general question is about references to DHCP: * the whole document, including the Abstract, assumes the reader already knows what is DHCP. I have no concern about this but perhaps I should? I propose to keep this point closed until someone else raises it (so it could enter into the any other LC comments) <PRC> OK, if it comes up we will deal with it. * 1.2 (Terminology) is only about CAPWAP, IMHO even you don't abuse of DHCP specific terms it is a good place to add DHCP references (the three at the beginning of the Security Considerations for instance). <PRC> I added a reference to RFC2131 in section 1.2 as it has a good terminology (section 1.5) - the second question is about the use (or abuse) of 2119 keywords at unusual places, namely in the Introduction (i.e., before the 2119 reference) and in the IANA Considerations. But it is only a question of usage/style... <PRC> I fixed the reference in the Introductions section. - in TOC and section 6: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments <PRC> I think perhaps your version is the queen's english, while mine is the one accepted in the US :( Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
