I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document..........: draft-ietf-pwe3-cep-mib-12 Reviewer..........: Christian Vogt Review date.......: August 6, 2007 Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC I have no objections against publishing this document, yet would suggest considering the following three comments: - Introductory sections 1 through 4: References to related documents are currently scattered across these sections. It would in my opinion make sense to group all these references in a single section, perhaps section 1. This would make it easier for the reader to go back and look them up as it becomes necessary while reading the document. - Security Considerations section: The vulnerabilities discussed in this section do not directly fit into the scope of a Security Considerations sections, because they already exist and are not introduced by the document at hand: (i) consequences of misconfiguration; (ii) security considerations for MIBs in general, such as SET operations in insecure environments, or GET operations on confidential data; (iii) security issues in SNMP versions older than version 3. Notwithstanding this, all of these vulnerabilities are certainly important for network administrators to be aware of. I therefore suggest adding a paragraph at the beginning of the Security Considerations section that explains that the document itself does not introduce new vulnerabilities, but that the following vulnerabilities of related mechanisms should be considered. - Some nits: Abstract: Packet Switch Network -> Packet Switched Network Introduction: Acronym "PSN" is defined twice. Introduction: Acronym "VT" is not defined. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
