I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-igp-sync-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-11-12 IETF LC End Date: 2008-11-18 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Comments: I have many editorial concerns: - Abstract page 1: use of abbrevs (LSP, LDP, VPN, IGP). IMHO only IP and MPLS are supposed to be known by everybody... (note the Abstract is considered as an autonomous text for that) - Abstract page 1: e.g. -> e.g., - ToC page 2: * With -> with ? * Author's -> Authors' * Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - Abbrevs: as the document *heavily* uses abbrevations I propose to reference as early as possible (i.e., before the first abbrev) a place where the terminology (including abbrevs) is defined. - 1 page 2: i.e. -> i.e., - 1 page 2: a L2 -> an L2 ? - 1 page 3: can not -> cannot ? - 2 page 4: can not -> cannot ? - 4 page 5 (title): With -> with - 5 page 5: trigged -> triggered ? - 9 page 6: Author's -> Authors' - 10 page 8: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 10 page 8: please move Acknowledgments before the Copyright Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
