I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-pkix-ecc-subpubkeyinfo-10.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-12-03 IETF LC End Date: 2008-12-09 IESG Telechat date: 1008-12-18 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - the Abstract mentions RFC 3279 when the body of the document uses only the reference [PKI-ALG]. The standard solution should be to add the reference into the Abstract but it is forbidden so I propose to add the title of RFC 3279 in the Abstract. - TOC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 2: I propose to add "RFC 3279" before the first [PKI-ALG] - 2.1 page 4: "This value is also used when a key is used with ECDSA." wording can be improved if the word "used" is not used twice? - 2.1.1 page 5: "The AlgorithmIdentifier within subjectPublicKeyInfo is the only place ..." formally the AlgorithmIdentifier is the type of the field, not the field name so is not a "place" - 3 page 7: at the first occurrence: CA -> Certification Authority (CA) - 3 page 8: at the first occurrence: EE -> End Entity (EE) - 4 page 10: please either add a reference for the MOV (Menezes, Okamoto and Vanstone) "condition" or improve the the wording making clear the whole sentence is referenced by [X9.62]. - 4 page 10: IMHO it is not really necessary to add references for MD2 and MD5. - 6 page 11: in NIST's arc -> in the NIST arc - 7 page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 8.1 page 12: Standards for Efficient Cryptography -> Standards for Efficient Cryptography Group (SECG) Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] PS: I don't comment about the technical details (I believe a consensus was reached even this took a long time and many messages :-) and I assume the ASN.1 part was (or will soon be) checked with dedicated tools. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
