I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-sipping-update-pai-09.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2009-05-06 IETF LC End Date: 2009-05-11 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: none Minor issues: IMHO the Abstract should be reworded a bit before publication (RFC Editor could handle this) Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 3: the right place to introduce common abbrevs: UAC, UAS, URI... - 2 page 3: UAC and URI abbrevs should be introduced - 2 page 4: same for UAS - 3.1 page 4: same for PSTN (I suggest in "o PSTN gateways;") - 3.2 page 6: poor wording: "with methods that are not provided for in RFC 3325 or any other RFC." - 7 page 10 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
