I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-sipping-cc-framework-11.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2009-06-09 IETF LC End Date: 2009-06-09 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - in Abstract page 2: SIP -> Session Initiation Protocol (SIP) - ToC page 3: Far fork -> Far-fork (or Near-fork -> Near fork but fixing the far branch seems better) - Toc page 4: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments (IETF/RFC Editor spelling) - 2.3 page 10: the UA abbrev should be introduced (and IMHO far before) - 2.4.2.1 page 12: large- scale -> large-scale - 2.6.7.2 page 17: the IVR abbrev must be introduced - 3.3.2 page 26: from controller) -> from controller): - 3.3.2 page 26: i.e. -> i.e., (same for other i.e. and e.g.) - 3.3.5 page 28: a central mixer) -> a central mixer). - 3.3.8 page 29 (title): Far fork -> Far-fork - 3.2.8 page 30: forked-media -> forked media ? - 4 page 30: The class ... include -> includes ? - 6.31 page 39: (ex: -> (e.g., - 7 page 39 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
