All,
I propose the following RFC Editor note...
Section 1
OLD
Although both static and dynamic configuration of MPLS-TP transport
paths (including Operations, Administration and Maintenance (OAM) and
protection capabilities) is required by this document, it MUST be
possible for operators to be able to completely operate (including
OAM and protection capabilities) an MPLS-TP network in the absence of
any control plane.
NEW
MPLS-TP transport paths may be established using static or dynamic
configuration. It should be noted that the MPLS-TP network and its
transport paths can always be operated fully (including OAM and
protection capabilities) in the absence of any control plane.
- - - -
Section 2
OLD
This document specifies the requirements of an MPLS Transport Profile
(MPLS-TP). The requirements are for the behavior of the protocol
mechanisms and procedures that constitute building blocks out of
which the MPLS transport profile is constructed. That is, the
requirements indicate what features are to be available in the MPLS
toolkit for use by MPLS-TP. The requirements in this document do not
describe what functions an MPLS-TP implementation supports. The
purpose of this document is to identify the toolkit and any new
protocol work that is required.
NEW
The MPLS-TP requirements set out in this section are for the behavior
of the protocol mechanisms and procedures that constitute building
blocks out of which the MPLS transport profile is constructed.
That is, the requirements indicate what features are to be available
in the MPLS toolkit for use by MPLS-TP.
- - - -
Please let me know if this is acceptable.
A
----- Original Message -----
From: "Christian Vogt" <christian.v...@ericsson.com>
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Sent: Thursday, July 16, 2009 1:25 AM
Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mpls-tp-requirements
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call
comments you may receive.
Document..........: draft-ietf-mpls-tp-requirements
Reviewer..........: Christian Vogt
Review date.......: July 15, 2009
Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
that should be fixed before publication.
This document specifies protocol requirements for MPLS in packet
transport networks. The document is of very good quality, with an
elaborate introduction explaining the background for this document.
Two editorial nits that the authors should consider addressing prior
to publication of this document are the following:
- The fourth paragraph on page 6, which is part of the introduction,
already specifies a requirement. I suggest moving this to section
2, since this is the section that is dedicated to requirements.
- The first paragraph of section 2 is a duplicate; it already appears in
the introduction. I suggest removing it from section 2. The
paragraph is important for the reader to understand the scope of the
document, and hence should retain its prominent position in the
introduction rather than the position in section 2.
Best regards,
- Christian
On Jul 2, 2009, The IESG wrote:
The IESG has received a request from the Multiprotocol Label Switching
WG
(mpls) to consider the following document:
- 'MPLS-TP Requirements '
<draft-ietf-mpls-tp-requirements-09.txt> as a Proposed Standard
The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
final comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the
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