I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-hokey-key-mgm-08.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2009-07-30 IETF LC End Date: 2009-08-03 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: I understand this specification is very abstract about on wire entities (for instance there is nothing about encoding, etc) but this can become an issue about key labels, i.e., the reader has to read the (referenced) RFC 5295 if (s)he wants to know what are exactly these key labels (note the term "label" can denote many different things). I suggest to be lightly more reader friendly, for instance by writing the RFC 5295 establishes a IANA registry for "USRK Key Labels" too: for the specification of key labels -> ... and associated IANA registry. Nits/editorial comments: [Usual RFC Editor style stuff] - ToC page 3 and 8 page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 4 and 6.1 page 10: e.g. -> e.g., - 1 page 4, 2 page 5, 4 page 7 and 6.1 page 10: i.e. -> i.e., - 6.2 pages 10 and 11: (suggestion) a RK -> an RK - I give up about: handover -> hand-over - 4 page 7 and 4.2 page 9: (suggestion) roundtrip -> round-trip Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
