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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-isms-radius-vacm-09.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2010-08-15 IETF LC End Date: 2010-08-12 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: (I add a question mark for questionable suggestions) - 1 page 3: perhaps (because it is in the 'well known' list) you should put again the definition of the "MIB" abbrev? - 4.1 page 4: the user-to-role (group) mapping -> mappings? - 4.1 page 4 (last word): behaviour -> behavior - 7.1 page 6: They rely critically -> They critically rely? - 7.2.1 page 7: in use -> in use; and identifier -> identifier; (the ; at the end of list items is the French typo rule, I don't know the English one, nor the RFC one if there is one :-) - 7.2.3 page 8 (last line): supercede -> supersede - 8 page 9: LAST-UPDATED "201007150000Z" -- 14 July, 2010 -> 15 July - 8 page 10 vacmAaaSecurityToGroupTable: used for the -> used for the - 8 page 10 vacmAaaSecurityToGroupEntry: e.g. -> e.g., - 9 page 13: dangling ')'? in 'RADIUS User-Name).' Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr PS: I expect you already checked the MIB with one of the usual tools... _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
