Hi Miguel,
Thank you for your review.
All your changes have been applied in my temporary version.
I will post a new version after the end of the last call, January 27th
midnight.
Regards, Benoit.
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Document: draft-ietf-pmol-metrics-framework-07.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[email protected]>
Review Date: 25-Jan-2011
IETF LC End Date: 27-Jan-2011
Summary: The document is ready for publication as a BCP.
Major issues: none
Minor issues: none
Nits/editorial comments:
- Abstract: the word "over" is duplicated.
- Section 1, first paragraph. Missing dot closing the paragraph.
- Section 3, first paragraph. I recommend to use the present tense in
the last sentence of the paragraph:
"As such, this document does not defined any performance metrics".
- Section 5.2, first paragraph.
s/of an networking/of a networking
^^
- Section 5.4.3, last paragraph. Add a formal informative reference to
RFC 3550.
- Section 5.4.5, forth paragraph. Add a formal informative reference
to RFC 3611.
- Section 5.4.5, 7th paragraph. Add a formal informative reference to
RFC 3611.
/Miguel
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