Oops - forgot to cc gen-art. ---------- Forwarded message ---------- From: Mary Barnes <mary.ietf.bar...@gmail.com> Date: Mon, Jun 4, 2012 at 5:34 PM Subject: Gen-ART Review:draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-gtsm-08.txt To: draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-gtsm....@tools.ietf.org
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-gtsm-08.txt Reviewer: Mary Barnes Review Date: 4 June 2012 IETF LC End Date: 29 May 2012 IESG Telechat Date: 07 June 2012 Summary: Ready with minor nits Editorial nits: 1) Section 1: - 2nd para, last sentence: This sentence doesn't quite parse - it's not normative, so it should either be deleted or reworded. I suggest deleting as I think it's somewhat superfluous. - Next to last paragraph - last three sentences - a little verbose & somewhat redundant. I think it can be summarized something like the following: OLD: This document specifies a "built-in dynamic GTSM capability negotiation" for LDP to suggest the use of GTSM. GTSM will be used as specified in this document provided both peers on an LDP session can detect each others' support for GTSM procedures and agree to use it. That is, the desire to use GTSM (i.e., its negotiation mechanics) is enabled by default without any configuration. NEW: This document specifies a dynamic GTSM capability negotiation mechanism for LDP. This mechanism allows both peers on an LDP session to indicate the support and use of GTSM without requiring any configuration. 2) Section 2.2, 1st para, last sentence: "and RECOMMENDED" -> "and are RECOMMENDED"
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