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Document: draft-ietf-trill-rbridge-channel-06.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.a.gar...@ericsson.com>
Review Date: 2012-06-19
IETF LC End Date: 2012-06-20
IESG Telechat date: 2012-06-21
Summary: This document is ready for publication as a standards track RFC
Major issues: none
Minor issues: none
Nits/editorial comments:
The document is well written and easy to read. Congratulations to the
authors.
I have some minor editorial comments.
- All the figures that represent bits on the wire do not follow the
convention of numbering the bits. I would suggest to add the bit number
as per the RFC style guide. This means adding these two lines to most
figures in the document:
0 1 2 3
0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1
- Also, related to figures. I would suggest to add a caption to each
figure, for example, under the figure in Section 2.1:
Figure 2: RBridge Channel Message inner frame
This allows other documents to easily refer to the figure by number
(e.g., "Figure 2 in RFC xxxx").
- Section 2.1.1: s/species/specifies
- Section 4. There are 5 bullet points. Something is wrong with the
indentation of the third bullet point.
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
+34-91-339-3608
Ericsson Spain
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