Thanks Roni, Good catches. Adrian From: ietf-boun...@ietf.org [mailto:ietf-boun...@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Roni Even Sent: 13 August 2012 22:07 To: draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis....@tools.ietf.org Cc: gen-art@ietf.org; i...@ietf.org Subject: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05. Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date:2012-8-12 IETF LC End Date: 2012-8-17 IESG Telechat date: Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard track RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: In section 6.1 " If specified more than once, instances preceding the first will be ignored and condition SHOULD be logged for possible action by the network operator." I am not sure what is meant by preceding the first. Nits/editorial comments: 1. The following note appears in section 10.1, 10.2 and 10.3. "Note that the same values for the Inter-RA Export Upward sub-TLV and the Inter-RA Export Downward Sub-TLV MUST be used when they appear in the Link TLV, Node Attribute TLV, and Router Address TLV." - why not have it in section 10 before section 10.1. 2. I saw in appendix B that one of the changes from RFC 5787 was to clarify the terminology before defining extensions, I would have found it easier to read if the ASON hierarchy and the relation to OSPF in section 2 were presented in figures. This was more an issue to me as a reader not familiar with the terminology and I would like to think that the more familiar reader will not have problem.
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