Hi Dave, Sorry for a late reply addressing your comments. Please, see inline.
Thanks, Nabil From: "Black, David" <david.bl...@emc.com<mailto:david.bl...@emc.com>> Date: Monday, August 20, 2012 8:57 PM To: "dinmo...@hotmail.com<mailto:dinmo...@hotmail.com>" <dinmo...@hotmail.com<mailto:dinmo...@hotmail.com>>, "Bitar, Nabil N" <nabil.n.bi...@one.verizon.com<mailto:nabil.n.bi...@one.verizon.com>>, Sagessi <saja...@cisco.com<mailto:saja...@cisco.com>>, "gen-art@ietf.org<mailto:gen-art@ietf.org>" <gen-art@ietf.org<mailto:gen-art@ietf.org>> Cc: "Black, David" <david.bl...@emc.com<mailto:david.bl...@emc.com>>, "p...@ietf.org<mailto:p...@ietf.org>" <p...@ietf.org<mailto:p...@ietf.org>>, "i...@ietf.org<mailto:i...@ietf.org>" <i...@ietf.org<mailto:i...@ietf.org>> Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06 Reviewer: David L. Black Review Date: August 20, 2012 IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. <NB> Thanks. This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires, including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior. The draft is generally in good shape. I found a few minor nits. 1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to be expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the draft listing all of them would be helpful. <NB> Done. 2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2: covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions, Administration and Opertaions -> Operations. <NB> Thanks. Done. 3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document: [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006. [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", Metro Ethernet Forum Technical Specification MEF16, January 2006. <NB> changed it to : 4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination: == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22 longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines <NB> That will be fixed. Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 david.bl...@emc.com<mailto:david.bl...@emc.com> Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ----------------------------------------------------
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