Hi Vijay, Thanks for the comments. Responses below:
On Mon, Feb 11, 2013 at 10:37 AM, Vijay K. Gurbani <v...@bell-labs.com>wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/**area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> > >. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-simple-simple-08 > Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani > Review Date: Feb-11-2013 > IETF LC End Date: Feb-14-2013 > IESG Telechat date: Not known > > This document is ready as an Informational. Some comments for > changes follow. > > Major: 0 > Minor: 2 > Nits: 1 > > Minor: > - S2.1, discussion of rfc3265: RFC3265 is now made obsolete by rfc6665, > I believe an update is appropriate here as well as other places where > a reference to rfc3265 is made. > Fixed. > > Additionally, a reference to rfc3856 will be appropriate when > we first talk about presence as a SUBS/NOT event package i.e., > s/Presence is defined as an event package/Presence is defined as > an event package [RFC3865]/ > Fixed. > > - S3.2, discussion of rfc3862: Does CPIM stand for "Common Presence and > Instant Messaging" or does it stand for "Common Profile for Instant > Messaging", as expanded in rfc3862 itself? > Actually, the title of RFC3862 is in fact "Common Presence and Instant Messaging", even though the message format it defines is common profile for instant messaging. As such, I have kept this since the acronym refers to the title of the spec. > > Nits: > > - Abstract, perhaps better for a standard document to use more > formal language and: > s/It breaks them up into categories/It categorizes the specifications/ > Fixed. > > Thanks, > > - vijay > -- > Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent > 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60563 (USA) > Email: vkg@{bell-labs.com,acm.org} / > vijay.gurbani@alcatel-lucent.**com<vijay.gurb...@alcatel-lucent.com> > Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/**vkg/<http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/> > Thanks, Jonathan R. -- Jonathan Rosenberg, Ph.D. jdro...@jdrosen.net http://www.jdrosen.net
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