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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Aug-26-2013
IETF LC End Date: Unknown
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

This document is ready as an Proposed Standard.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 1

Nits:

- S1, first paragraph: Expand "OTN" on first use.  Also,
 s/provided for [G709-2012]./provided for OTNs [G709-2012]./

 The last substitution above is a general comment since this construct
 appears multiple times in S1 and the rest of the document.

 Essentially, you need a label before the reference itself.  Making the
 reference itself a label seems incongruent (at least to me).  I am
 filing this as a nit, so I will let you decide whether to change it or
 not.

Thanks,

- vijay
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