Thanks for the response. Those changes would address all of my comments. Thanks!
Ben. On Oct 31, 2013, at 11:05 AM, Paul Aitken <pait...@cisco.com> wrote: > Thanks for the review, Ben. > > As you pointed out, the description in 3.2.18 wrongly specified a delta > rather than a total; I've fixed it. > > I also clarified the third paragraph of the Introduction to say that the > existing models don't yet contain enough elements - which is the point of > this draft. > > Regarding section 4 / RFC 5477, the intention is that IANA's IPFIX registry > is the ultimate reference. We want to avoid new drafts updating old RFCs. > The IPFIX AD is considering how to proceed with that. > > I'll publish a -07 with the changes. > > Thanks, > P. > >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >> you may receive. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-ipfix-data-link-layer-monitoring-06 >> Reviewer: Ben Campbell >> Review Date: 2013-22-10 >> IETF LC End Date: 2013-23-10 >> >> Summary: Ready for publication as a proposed standard, with one problem >> that should be easily fixed. >> >> Major issues: >> >> None >> >> Minor issues: >> >> 3.2.18: >> >> Title of the data element suggests a total, but the description sounds like >> a delta (i.e change since last report.) >> >> -- section 4 and subsections >> >> It looks like this draft updates at least RFC5477. If so, this should be >> indicated in the header and in the abstract. >> >> >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> >> -- section , 3rd paragraph: >> >> Do you mean to say the existing data models do not contain the elements >> needed, or that the models do not provide the right foundation for the >> needed elements? The wording seems to indicate the latter but I think you >> mean the former. >> >> -- General: >> Watch for missing articles. > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
