Thanks for your review & re-review, David! I have balloted no-obj, for this Thursday's IESG telechat.
Jari On Jan 17, 2014, at 1:30 AM, "Black, David" <david.bl...@emc.com> wrote: > The -12 version of this draft addresses the nits and editorial items > noted in the Gen-ART review of the -11 version. It's ready for > RFC publication. > > Thanks, > --David > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Gen-art [mailto:gen-art-boun...@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Black, David >> Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2013 9:51 PM >> To: General Area Review Team (gen-art@ietf.org); attila.tak...@ericsson.com; >> donald.fe...@alcatel-lucent.com; he...@huawei.com >> Cc: adr...@olddog.co.uk; cc...@ietf.org; i...@ietf.org >> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration- >> fwk-11 >> >> One additional nit - Don Fedyk's email address listed in the draft does not >> work. >> >> Thanks, >> --David >> >>> -----Original Message----- >>> From: Black, David >>> Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2013 9:46 PM >>> To: General Area Review Team (gen-art@ietf.org); attila.tak...@ericsson.com; >>> donald.fe...@alcatel-lucent.com; he...@huawei.com >>> Cc: Black, David; adr...@olddog.co.uk; cc...@ietf.org; i...@ietf.org >>> Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 >>> >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >>> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >>> >>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >>> >>> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >>> you may receive. >>> >>> Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 >>> Reviewer: David L. Black >>> Review Date: December 29, 2013 >>> IETF LC End Date: January 5, 2014 >>> >>> Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that >>> should be fixed before publication. >>> >>> This draft describes the GMPLS framework for signaling OAM configuration, >>> and specifies additional RSVP elements to support that signaling. Knowledge >>> of RSVP, and specifically RSVP-TE is assumed; beyond that, the draft is >>> complete, although it is very detailed - see editorial comment below on >>> Section 3. >>> >>> Nits/editorial comments: >>> >>> Sections 3.1-3.3 dive into the details very quickly. They would be easier >> to >>> understand if there was an overview paragraph near the start of Section 3 >> that >>> describes the roles of the two ADMIN_STATUS flags and the two LSP Attributes >>> flags in OAM configuration (establishment, change/adjustment, deletion) >> before >>> the current text that contains the details of RSVP message processing. >>> >>> There are a number of instances of "(IANA to assign)" in section 4 that the >>> RFC Editor will need to remove - an RFC Editor note to that effect should >>> be inserted at the start of Section 4. >>> >>> Section 4.5 is necessarily incomplete on P2MP considerations, because (as >>> it says) "P2MP OAM mechanisms are very specific to the data plane >> technology". >>> It would be helpful if section 4.5 contained language indicating what a >>> specific data plane specification should include to completely specify >>> P2MP OAM configuration for that data plane. >>> >>> idnits 2.13.01 didn't find anything that needs attention. >>> >>> Thanks, >>> --David >>> ---------------------------------------------------- >>> David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer >>> EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 >>> +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 >>> david.bl...@emc.com Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 >>> ---------------------------------------------------- >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Gen-art mailing list >> Gen-art@ietf.org >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
