Thanks for your (old) review of this document. Given the significant textual changes, I also re-read the document now. Looked OK to me… and at least some of the editorial comments have been taken into account.
jari On Jun 27, 2013, at 12:15 PM, Francis Dupont <francis.dup...@fdupont.fr> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-10.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20130617 > IETF LC End Date: 20130619 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > - ToC page 3 and 7 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > > - 2 page 4: double include words in: > > The services supported include pseudowire based services (RFC 3985 > [RFC3985]), including VPN services, > > I suggest something like: > > The supported services are, but not limited to, pseudowire based > services (RFC 3985 [RFC3985]), including VPN services, > > - 3 page 5 (component link): the term NPO is used before being defined > > - 3 page 5 (component link): expand the WDM abbrev -- not well known > according tothe RFC Editor list: > http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-style-guide/abbrev.expansion.txt > > - 3 page 5 (flow identification): same for the PW abbrev > > - 4.1 page 6: CAN -> MAY > > - 6 page 12 (MR#10) -> interpretted -> interpreted > > - 9 page 13: Encrption -> Encryption > > - Authors' Addresses: add the country (USA) in postal addresses > > Regards > > francis.dup...@fdupont.fr > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
