Confirming that rev -15 addresses my Gen-ART review comments... - Ralph
> On Dec 16, 2015, at 11:19 AM 12/16/15, Ralph Droms (rdroms) > <rdr...@cisco.com> wrote: > > >> On Dec 16, 2015, at 10:47 AM 12/16/15, Alexey Melnikov >> <alexey.melni...@isode.com> wrote: >> >> Hi Ralph, >> Thank you for your review. Sorry I missed it earlier. > > You're welcome. Looks like we have agreement on my editorial comments and > suggestions. Will the edits you mention below appear in rev -15? > > - Ralph > >> >> On 09/12/2015 20:47, Ralph Droms (rdroms) wrote: >>> Nits/editorial comments: >>> >>> Nicely written, very clear document. >> Thank you. >>> idnits reports some lines too long and an unused reference. >> I fixed the reference in my copy. I hope RFC Editor can help with lines >> which are too long. >>> In the third paragraph of the Introduction, I suggest removing the >>> parentheses and editing the second sentence for clarity; specifically, what >>> is "SCRAM data"? >> I meant SCRAM requests and responses. >>> You could probably omit the parentheses in the second paragraph of Setion >>> 3, as well, I'm likely just arguing style. >> Barry picked on this as well, so this was rewritten for clarity. >>> The last sentence of the last paragraph of sectino 3 was unclear to me: >>> which messages are referred to? >> Message is the same as 'decoded "data" attribute' in the previous sentence. >> I clarified that. >>> I think, in the phrase "fail the authentication" in the fifth paragraph of >>> section 8, you are using "fail" as a transitive verb, as in "the client >>> considers the authentication of the message to have failed" >> ... and does whatever is appropriate in this case. Which might be closing >> the connection, retrying or trying another (non SCRAM) mechanism. >>> . If I have that write, I suggest rewriting the containing sentence to >>> improve the clarity. >> >> Best Regards, >> Alexey >> >> >
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