Donald,
>> For cases of "[RFC5310] Based authentication" to "[RFC5310]-based
>> authentication". Watch for one instance of "RFC 5310 Based" as well.
>OK.
>(Nit-Nit: I think in the nit above, the first word should be Four.)
Ha! (I hadn't actually counted the number of cases. )
>> Page 12, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "These constructed addresses"
>> to "A constructed address".
>Humm. I don't really like your suggested change. How about I change it to
>"Such a constructed address ..."
Fine by me.
>> Page 21, Section 7, 3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence: delete "processing
>> of". Or change "processing" to "process".
>Instead, change the immediately following "decapsulating" to "decapsulated".
That works as well.
Thanks for considering my suggestions.
-Peter
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