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For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-dmm-lma-controlled-mag-params-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20170217 IETF LC End Date: 20170224 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2 and 9 (title) page 8: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 2: you must expand the abbrevs at first use in the body of the document: the abstract is not a part of the body. - 1 page 2: singaling -> signaling - 3 page 3: suboptions -> sub-options (because the dash was at all other uses) - 3 page 4: the wording "The sub-options are optional" is ambiguous: it can mean that there is no mandatory sub-options or that the field can be empty. Obviously it is the first according to the section 3 intro "MUST contain one or more". - 3.1 page 4: Binding Refresh Control Sub-Option -> Binding Re-registration Control Sub-Option (it is the official name of the option cf section 6) - authors' addresses page 12: China -> P.R. China or ISO 3166 CN BTW I have a question about the "Kansas": I can understand to put only the state for California or Texas but Kansas? (:-) Regars francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
