Hi Paul, Are you ok with my reply?
Regards, Christer On 10/07/17 12:02, "Christer Holmberg" <christer.holmb...@ericsson.com> wrote: >Pull request: https://github.com/cdh4u/draft-dtls-sdp/pull/33 > >(I kept the example in Section 8, but I fixed the reference) > >Regards, > >Christer > > >On 10/07/17 11:08, "Christer Holmberg" <christer.holmb...@ericsson.com> >wrote: > >>Hi Paul, >> >>Thanks for your review! Please see inline. >> >> >>>I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >>>Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the >>>IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other >>>last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at >>><http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >>> >>>Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-dtls-sdp-26 >>>Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat >>>Review Date: 2017-07-07 >>>IETF LC End Date: 2017-07-24 >>>IESG Telechat date: TBD >>> >>>Summary: >>> >>>This draft is basically ready for publication, but has a few nits that >>>should be fixed before publication. >>> >>>Issues: >>> >>>Major: 0 >>>Minor: 0 >>>Nits: 4 >>> >>>(1) NIT: >>> >>>Section 5.3: s/Eventhough/Even though/ >> >>Will be fixed. >> >>>(2) NIT: >>> >>>Section 8: s/aTLS/a TLS/ >> >>Will be fixed. >> >>>(3) NIT: >>> >>>Section 8: What is the point of including the example? I don't see how >>>it adds anything. Perhaps worked out O/A examples contrasting the >>>differences between the new and existing cases might be marginally >>>helpful. (But IMO not enough to bother with.) >> >>The idea was to take the existing example from RFC 4572 (I note the >>reference is wrong: s/3261/4572), and show how it looks with the tls-id >>attribute. >> >> >>>(4) NIT: >>> >>>Section 10.3.2: s/Througout/throughout/ >> >>Will be fixed. >> >>Regards, >> >>Christer >> > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
