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For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-sidrops-bgpsec-rollover-02.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20171007 IETF LC End Date: 20171017 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: IMHO the language itself needs some improvements. Unfortunately I am not a native English writer so I can only be a limited help... - Abstract page 1: bad wording in "... certificates BGPsec router certificates" - Abstract page 1: Normal -> normal - Abstract page 1: "creating" does not fit in grammar. Perhaps "which create"? - Abstract page 1: I suggest accomplished -> performed (this point is typical of why a native English writer will really help) - ToC page 2 and 4/4.2 page 7: titles of 4 and 4.2 are too close - ToC page 2 and 7 page 9: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2 page 2: I suggest the local policies of a network. -> the local policies of network. - 2 page 3: as the 2119 lowe case keyword issue is now solved you may use "may" as in "documents may reference" but perhaps with an upgrade to the standard 2119 reference text. I am asking to the gen-art what to do (and I expect to get an answer before the LC). - 2 page 3, 3.1 and 4 page 6: roll-over -> rollover (i.e. keep one spelling) - 4.2 page 7: i.e. -> i.e., Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
