I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20180512 IETF LC End Date: 20180521 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready with nits Major issues: None Minor issues: Missing keyword section (aka RFC 2119 section). BTW don't forget RFC8174 reference in this section... Nits/editorial comments: - 1 page 3: i.e. -> i.e., - 4.4.1 page 5: example of MUST keyword use. - 4.6 pages 6 and 7 ("is" is in page 6, "binding" in page 7): "The minimum amount ... is binding to ..." this wording is ambiguous because binding can be both a noun and a verb. I suggest (for the first case) to add an article, e.g., "is the binding". - 7 page 17: e.g. -> e.g., Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
