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For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-6tisch-architecture-20.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20190633 IETF LC End Date: 20190626 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - 1 page 3: the IT abbrev is not introduced - 2.1 page 5 (bundle), page 9 (slotOffset), 4.61 page 38 (2.): i.e. -> i.e., - 2.1 page 6 (chunk): missing closing parenthesis - 2.1 page 9 (Track): the text says the root is the destination. IMHO the DODAG has an unique leaf which is the destination? - 3.1 page 12: please expand the PCE abbrev here (first occurrence, note the expansion is in 3.3. page 15: you can move or duplicate it). - 3.2 page 14: the 6LBR ... need -> needs - 4.2.2 pafge 25 figure 6: there are multiple arrows for the RS. I believe it is a way to figure multicasting? - 4.3.1.1 page 27, 4.3.3 page 29, 4.5.3 page 35 (3 times), 4.7.1.2 page 42: e.g. -> e.g., - 4.6 page 37: one or more destination(s) 6TiSCH node(s) -> one or more destination 6TiSCH nodes Spelling: - 1 page 3: undated -> updated - 4.1.1 page 21: settig -> setting - 4.3.3. page 29: infoirmation -> information - 4.3.3 page 29: behaviour -> behavior - 4.4 page 33: multithop -> multihop - 4.7.1.1 page 42: dependant -> dependent - 7.1 page 51: implementaton -> implementation - A page 60 (PAW): Predicatable -> Predictable At the exception of the DODAG root in Track definition there is nothing which can't be done by the RFC Editor so could require a new version. Regards francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
