Hi Robert, Did you see those answers ? Do you want to review them before we publish an new ID ?
Thank you Olivier From: Olivier Gimenez Sent: 05 October 2020 11:54 To: 'Robert Sparks' <rjspa...@nostrum.com>; gen-art@ietf.org Cc: lp-...@ietf.org; last-c...@ietf.org; draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan....@ietf.org Subject: RE: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10 Dear Robert, Thank you for your review. I answered in your email. Olivier > -----Original Message----- > From: Robert Sparks via Datatracker > <nore...@ietf.org<mailto:nore...@ietf.org>> > The abstract says "This is called a profile." It would be better to say > something like "This document specifies a profile of RFC8724." I changed the paragraph to the following (commit f6a3ca7<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/f6a3ca7af50f1c468ad7171c4911760434567808>): This document specifies a profile of [RFC8724] to use SCHC in LoRaWAN networks, and provides elements such as efficient parameterization and modes of operation. > What does "other Internet networks" mean? Please replace the phrase with > something more descriptive. Thanks, I rephrased it for: (commit 94823f8<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>) SCHC provides a generic framework that enables those devices to communicate on IP networks. > The word "efficient" in the last sentence of the introduction is puzzling. > Could it simply be removed? Ok (commit 94823f8<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>) > As the shepherd report notes, there are figures that need to be reworked to > satisfy column constraints. Fixed in 8ce2196<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/8ce2196a301a0072c791df1363655453b750eee8> (Also fixes informative RFC which are not normative) To view our privacy policy, including the types of personal information we collect, process and share, and the rights and options you have in this respect, see www.semtech.com/legal.
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