Hi Tom, Thanks for your review. Please see below.
On 14.12.21 11:15, tom petch wrote:
From: OPSAWG <opsawg-boun...@ietf.org> on behalf of Russ Housley via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> Sent: 13 December 2021 22:02 Subject: [OPSAWG] Genart early review of draft-ietf-opsawg-sbom-access-03 Reviewer: Russ Housley Review result: Almost Ready <snip> Note: I am not a good persone to review the YANG specification. I assume one of the YANG Doctors will have a look at this document too. <tp> You could say that there is no YANG Module as YANG Modules must be registered with IANA and the IANA Considerations in this I-D do not do so:-) So IANA Considerations must register the module as per YANG Guidelines
Added.
Security Considerations must use the template referenced by YANG Guidelines
This one's a little weird, since we are augmenting the MUD module, which isn't intended to be retrieved via NETCONF, and nothing here is intended to be writeable. I could add read-only to all of this stuff.
The title in the revision reference clause bears little relationship to that of the I-D
Corrected.
YANG prefix must be unique and should be easy to use; I think that 'mud-transparency' is about 12 characters longer than I would class as easy to use (e.g. mudtx)
Sold.
URL is insecure and to an obsolete web site (tools) No mention of NMDA or lack of support thereof
Text welcome for this.
Lots of abbreviations not expanded on first use In our modern pageless format, Section one would be easier to refer to with more subsections such as one for terminology with expanded abbreviations
Generally we should expand abbreviations on first use. I will clean those up.
Why have a grouping and a uses which for me makes the module harder to understand? It is not as if this grouping is going to be imported in lots of places AFAICT.
It may. That is why it's a grouping. Again, thanks for the review. Eliot
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