Paul, thank you for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot for this document.
Authors, please take Paul's comments into account if you end up preparing a revision. Thanks, Lars > On 2022-4-5, at 0:27, Paul Kyzivat <pkyzi...@alum.mit.edu> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-teep-architecture-16 > Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat > Review Date: 2022-04-?? > IETF LC End Date: 2022-04-07 > IESG Telechat date: ? > > Summary: > > This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described in the review. > > Issues: > > Major: 0 > Minor: 2 > Nits: 3 > > 1) MINOR: Section 4.5, Fig 3 > > I find this figure confusing. It starts out looking like a sequence diagram, > where time flows from top to bottom. But then overlayed on it is a nested > text outline that seems to interact with the sequence diagram. Based on the > outline numbering I expect the time sequence to be 2a,2b,3,4. but based on > positioning within the sequence diagram it seems that the order should be > 2a,3,2b,4. I don't understand how this is intended to be read. > > 2) MINOR: Section 6.2.1: > > Is any persistent state assumed in this API or is it stateless? If state is > assumed, I would like to see the state model described. > > 3) NIT: Section 1: NIT > > TEEs use hardware enforcement combined with software protection to > secure TAs and its data. > > s/its/their/ > > 4) NIT: Section 2: Device User:... > > The last sentence is a fragment. Needs to be reworded. > > 5) NIT: IdNits > > IdNits reports a couple of outdated references that need updating. > > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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