Hi Dale! Thanks! See quickly below!
Mirja > On 6. Dec 2022, at 22:02, Dale Worley via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> > wrote: > > Reviewer: Dale Worley > Review result: Ready > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-shmoo-online-meeting-04 > Reviewer: Dale R. Worley > Review Date: 2022-12-06 > IETF LC End Date: 2022-12-13 > IESG Telechat date: [unknown] > > Summary: > > This draft is ready for publication as an informational RFC, with > the possible exception of the possible nits listed below. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > 2. Some History > > participants later indicated in mailing discussion that the period of > > "mailing discussion" is an unusual phrase. Perhaps "mail discussion" > was intended? > > intensive interims had a greater impact on their calendar than a > single plenary meeting week, and in some meeting. > > The final "in some meeting" seems to be incomplete and (given the > context) may be omitting something important. Yes, we messed something up here in the last revision. Already fixed here: https://github.com/mirjak/draft-shmoo-online-meeting/pull/24/files <https://github.com/mirjak/draft-shmoo-online-meeting/pull/24/files> > > 3.3. Session/Break Length > > The longer breaks, while extending the day, provided adequate time > for "hallway" conversations using online tools, exercise, and meals. > > Probably would be clearer as "... adequate time for meals, exercise, > and "hallway" conversations using online tools." Done. > > 4.1. Full vs. limited agenda (and interim meetings) > > This section heading and the one for section 4.2 are capitalized > differently from the rest. But I expect the Editor will deal with > that. Done. > > 4.2. Flexibility of time usage > > Hackathon for fully online only meetings is usually held in the week > > "fully online only" has two modifiers with the same meaning. Right, we changed that at some point and now use fully online instead online only; I guess the only was an oversight of that change. > > 4.4. Experiments > > Furthermore, the IESG SHOULD announce any such experiment in advance, > so people can adjust to changes and potentially provide feedback. > > I would intensify this as "announce ... well in advance". Done. Also changes here: https://github.com/mirjak/draft-shmoo-online-meeting/pull/26/files <https://github.com/mirjak/draft-shmoo-online-meeting/pull/26/files> > > 6.2. Informative References > > [_107-FEEDBACK] > > I see that there are a number of references with citation tags that > have this unusual format. Verify this is the intended format rather > than a formatting malfunction. Yes, not sure why this is. I hope the RPC can fix that… > > [END] > > > > _______________________________________________ > Manycouches mailing list > manycouc...@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/manycouches >
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