I have uploaded an update that more accurately indicates that a "session" is a secure association between two instances of the TLSTM.
Regards, Ken Vaughn Trevilon LLC 1060 S Hwy 107 Del Rio, TN 37727 +1-571-331-5670 cell kvau...@trevilon.com <mailto:kvau...@trevilon.com> www.trevilon.com <http://www.trevilon.com/> > On Feb 9, 2023, at 6:56 PM, Joel Halpern via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org > <mailto:nore...@ietf.org>> wrote: > > Reviewer: Joel Halpern > Review result: Ready > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>>. > > Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11 > Reviewer: Joel Halpern > Review Date: 2023-02-09 > IETF LC End Date: 2023-02-20 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC > > Major issues: N/A > > Minor issues: > In the fourth paragraph of section 1.1, the text refers to "a secure > association between two TLS Transport Models (TLSTMs)". As I understand > the terminology, there is one TLSTM. There are two instances of / > realizations of the model. Should the sentence refer to instances or > realizations, rather than two models? (i-d nits gets confused by the > references to rfc 5953 in the revision description. After looking at it, I > realized there was no problem here, rather it is accurate. A comment on > this in item 14 of the shepherd writeup would have been helpful.) > > Nits/editorial comments: N/A > > > > _______________________________________________ > OPSAWG mailing list > ops...@ietf.org <mailto:ops...@ietf.org> > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsawg >
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