Reviewer: Susan Hares Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-?? Reviewer: Susan Hares Review Date: 2024-03-04 IETF LC End Date: 2024-03-05 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: I want to thank the authors for carefully adjusting the technical document to the new terms. Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: English language editorial nits. Nit #1: in Section 6, last paragraph, sentence five beginning with "Security problems". old text:/ Security problems include on-path attacks such as delay attacks, packet interception / manipulation attacks. / New text: Security problems include on-path attacks such as delay attacks, packet interception, or manipulation attacks. / #Nit2 in Section 8, paragraph 3, sentence 1 Old text:/In PTP Networks that contain Transparent Clocks, time Transmitters might receive Delay messages that no longer contains the IP Addresses of Time Receivers./ change /contains/ to /contain/ - for agreement of plural subject to plural verb. #Nit 3, section 8, paragraph 3, sentence 2, incorrect spelling Wo "becuase" should be "because". _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
