Hi Tom,
On 02/19/2017 05:18 PM, Tom Henderson wrote:
Hello, I have read the latest (-17) draft and sent some purely editorial
comments to Miika. I had a few non-editorial questions and comments.
thanks for the feedback. I fixed the editorial issues in version 18:
There's also a htmlized version available at:
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-18
A diff from the previous version is available at:
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-18
I did not fix these (because I would prefer to keep the artwork small):
* Figure acronym un-abbreviations were not included
* ISPI and OSPI acronyms remain
(Also, if we use long parameter names in figures, I think all names
should be long, not just mobility related)
A couple of fixes for me to edit:
* Appendix B: normative vs non-normative terminology
* Alex Elsayed reported imbalanced parentheses in one picture
These and the non-editorial comments from Tom and Jeff will be resolved
in the next version.
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