Dave:
Thank you for the review of the document. We will provide an update of this document early next week. Sue From: i2rs [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of David Sinicrope Sent: Friday, June 24, 2016 12:35 PM To: [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] Subject: [i2rs] Routing directorate QA review of draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs Hello, I am the Routing Area Directorate member that was assigned the QA review of draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs-01. If you’re not familiar with the QA review process please see: https://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDirDocQa BR Dave General Comments: - overall the document is organized well and has a good flow leading from overall issues to specific issues and justified requirements. - the document presumes familiarity with the I2RS architecture and states this plainly cuing the reader to look there first. That said the document can be read standalone with a conceptual knowledge of the I2RS architecture. See the attached document for marked up and inline comments. Nits - singular / plural usage needs to be consistent - verb plural and tense match need attention Note: I got through page 14. Many comments earlier in the doc apply to the few remaining sections. Please let me know if you have any questions. Dave
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